The Icarian Legacy: Brave Souls
by Kocho Trajchevski
Excellent weaving of several story lines to mutually support each other. Bypassing the editing-spelling-misuse vortex for a bit let’s focus on how in this story line humans are rediscovering something lost to them through the ages. The concept that we keep squandering our time and resources on this planet, on petty meaningless issues, rather than pull together and become something grand is brought home in the wake up call that an alien invasion to farm us as slaves paints for us. Well done.
Now for the assembly. I started reading a very poorly edited copy of this but the author has put up an improved version. One thing that really needs to happen in this kind of writing is separation of point of view. Every time you shift point of view at least start a new paragraph and ideally space with a line. It makes the reader happier. I find it really helpful to keep a list of the characters names on a pad next to me while I write, it helps me to keep them straight while crafting the story. On the use of Military jargon I believe there was an over abundance of it though I feel it was used correctly most of the time.
As for any other editing issues I think the very story told in this book addresses the fact that we have many nations and cultures on earth. This author did an awesome first book in a language that is totally alien to his birth language and like the rest of ninety nine percent of us probably doesn’t have tons of money to get help. Once again I state ‘Excellent’ and I rate this at four out of five whatever units float your boat.
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